28 April 2009

劉禹錫 Liu Yuxi: 竹枝詞 二首 其一 Song of Bamboo Twigs, I of Two [*Green, O green is the willow...]

Here is another love-song from another great Tang master. Hope you enjoy it.

Liu Yuxi (772-842): Song of Bamboo Twigs, I of Two [*Green, O green is the willow...]

1 Green, O green is the willow, placid, peaceful the flow;
2 Hark and I hear on the river, songs from my love, my beau.
3 To the east, the sun is up, to the west, drizzles persist;
4 Though they say the sun is naught, to me, the sun is aglow.

Translated by Andrew W.F. Wong (Huang Hongfa)        譯者: 黄宏發
30th October 2008 (revised 3.11.08; 5.11.08; 17.11.08; 16.12.08; 25.2.09; 28.4.09)
Translated from the original - 劉禹錫: 竹枝詞 二首 其一 [*楊柳青青...]

1 楊柳青青江水平
2 聞郎江上唱歌聲
3 東邊日出西邊雨
4 道是無晴卻有晴


* The original poem is in 7-character lines. This English rendition is in hexameter (6 metrical feet). The rhyme scheme is AABA as in the original.

* Line 1: I had considered “Green, serene” but have decided that “Green, O green” is better for being more faithful to the original.

* Line 2: Following “love”, the word “beau” should be taken to mean lover or suitor only, and not dandy or fop.

* Line 4: The main difficulty in this line is that in Chinese, 晴 (meaning sunny) and 情 (meaning love, affection) have the same sound, thus creating, with 無 (no/not) and 有 (have/is), a double meaning of 無晴-有晴 and 無情-有情. I think my rendition has covered it well, particularly having written “songs from my love, my beau” in line 2. If “to me, the sun is aglow” is considered too subtle, an excellent alternative is “for me, my sun is aglow”



Travel Lok said...

For us not schooled in Chinese literature and poetry, I prefer the alternative you suggest in Line 4 - "for me, my love is aglow", which more quickly evokes the romantic nature of this poem.

Unknown said...

Dear Uncle Fat,

Here's my "sandy-gall" attempt based on your great translation:

Green is the willow, placid the flow;
Over the river come songs from my beau;
The east is fine, the west in drizzles;
Ye or nay, the glow flickers so.

Must be terrible, I know. Hope you wouldn't mind.

Best regards,

Andrew W.F. Wong 黃宏發 said...

Dear Travel Lok, Thank you. You have made up my mind for me. It will be "for me my love is aglow" then.

Dear fish, I think by "sandy-gall" 沙膽 you mean "bold/brave". Yours is an excellent attempt, but the last ,line is a bit too weak.

Andrew W.F. Wong 黃宏發 said...

Dear Fish, I just happen to re-visit this poem and find that I should have suggested to you an alternative line 4 as "Say aye or no, the glow glows so". Apologies.

maple said...

Uhh...what does that mean? I'm not a literate in kanji and other stuffs, I just wanna know the meaning of the whole poem like "the poem is about confession then the confession be like: Everything I see is beautiful when I'm with you, so will you stay with me" or something else like that?

Unknown said...

How i love this poem! I first read it from a Korean drama. It has really captivated my soul for its inclusion of nature and romance. ❤

Unknown said...

This is the poem the 8th Prince Wang Wook had given Hae Soo in the Kdrama, Scarlet Heart. This is such a great one. Short but meaningful.

Unknown said...

Can someone explain the meaning of the poem, please?

Unknown said...

Fell in love with the poem : Moon lovers, Scarlett heart rhyo

Airwrecka said...

I fell in love with this poem in Moon Lovers: Scarlet Heart Ryeo. This was given by 8th Prince Wang Wook to Hae Soo, who is the cousin of his wife, Lady Myung Hee (in case you haven't watched the series yet.) The 8th Prince Wang Wook is developing feelings for Hae Soo who also has akin interest for him but both are struggling not to give in. It may seem that it is just about a beautiful landscape/scenery but in the series, according to 13th Prince Baek Ah, it is a love poem. If you change the word "sun" to "love" it is about a wavering heart. Perfectly depicting the complicated feelings of Prince Wook.

"Though they say the love is naught
To me, then love is aglow"

It is also said that in Chinese, the word "sunny" and "love" have the same sound, giving the double meaning of the poem.

In other translation of Moon Lovers is it also said that the poem is used to make a confession.

Anonymous said...

You are on point 🔛👌

Anonymous said...

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Anonymous said...

You have a very vital point in your speech so far

Anonymous said...

I still don't get it. Please enlighten me


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